Essay Band 8 Pressure on Children - IELTS IDV

Essay Band 8 Pressure on Children

“Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What are the reasons for doing this? Is this a negative or positive development?”

Sample Essay Band 8.0 – 9.0 from  Ielts Writing 8.0 Book by Duong VuHọc Ielts Writing có hệ thống, Hiệu Quả và Tiết Kiệm hơn với Sách + Bài Giảng Hướng Dẫn Viết Luận Ielts Essay 8.0 and Ideas by Dương Vũ (8.0 writing):

It is true that many parents are now putting their children under too much pressure to perform well. There could be several reasons for this and I believe pushy parenting, no matter how well-intentioned it is, tends to do more harm than good.

Probably, the fundamental cause of this controversial child-rearing style is the widely-accepted belief that life is a race for success. In order to win the race and be honoured as a so-called “successful” person, one must constantly compete with others. Bringing up children in an increasingly competitive world has become a real struggle. Parents may fear that they are not doing enough to position their child for future achievements and that their child might be left behind. In addition, this parenting trend can also be attributed to cultural norms.  In most Asian countries, children doing poorly at schools are considered a disgrace to their families. Peer pressure has urged parents to push their kids harder in order to become the most accomplished individuals and bring honor to their family.

This over-demanding parenting approach might have a range of adverse effects on children’s lives. While it’s healthy to set high expectations, placing an enormous amount of pressure on them can be harmful. Chronic stress over how to achieve exceptional grades and outstanding performance in extracurricular activities may put young people at risk of developing depression, sleep deprivation and other mental conditions. Furthermore, by focusing solely on achievements, high-pressure parents have taught their kids to fear failure and become unwilling to take risks. This is detrimental because people can only succeed if they are allowed to fail, make mistakes and learn from them. 

In conclusion, although it is a good intention to help children carve out a bright future, parents are pushing their little ones too hard in the cut-throat race to the top. A balanced parenting style combining strict discipline with encouragement should be adopted instead.

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